I have so many drafts on my blog, I write everyday but most just end up as drafts cos I use this account as a sort of diary... thats why they are drafts...anyway...so today, I decided to look through them just like you would do if you had a diary...and I came across this...the same thought but three different versions... I don't know what I was gonna use it for..no fucking clue...
Version one
Your sweet lips
and muscular arms
your bare chest
and strong buttocks
your loving hands
and hard....
"I have missed you so", he said, gathering me into his arms and planting a kiss on my inviting lips, "where have you been?", no where...I have been here, waiting for you....
And all this is nothing but the pleasure of a shadow of a thought.
Version two
"I have missed you so", he said, gathering me into his arms and planting a kiss on my inviting lips, "where have you been?", nowhere...I have been here, waiting for you....
"waffy? you okay?"
"Yes I am, why?"
"why are you smiling?"
"Oh, it was the pleasure of a thought"
"A thought?"
"No it wasn't...it was the shadow of a thought, yes, thats what it was, just a
shadow"
Version three
In what seemed to be a moment
I wrote words from depths
that knew no depths
and every word had but a moment
to describe feelings
to describe reasons
why all this must be said at this moment
and when all was said, it took just a moment
for me to realise it was all a shadow of a thought.
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Fiiiiiiiiiirsssssttt!!!!
Okay let me go and sleep. Afrobabe has bitten me with this first bug.
You know, ...hmmm...well...however sha.
a bit confusing dont know which one to like best
@misspumping:hehehehe...I don't even know what this was for...my guess is that I liked the thought of "a shadow of a thought" and then I tried to use it and after repeated attempts to get something out of that sentence, the whole thought was abandoned...I hope to get a short story out of that sentence...it will come...
Is the aim for us to choose the best version? If so I go for version one. Just cos it has the potential to get a little you know...
Seriously I think all 3 versions have potential. Lol
Kr.
waffy always has perverted thoughts and then u will be calling me a bad girl...mssstssssthw!!!!!!
I wonder if the idiom "beyond a shadow of a doubt" subconciously (or otherwise) influenced this.
Hmmm...all good, but liked the 2nd version best. Don't know why.
But I suppose the first version has more for a story or is the most 'versatile' for further development.
They say write is gotten from "rewrite"...
I like the third version and am beginning to wonder what the final version will look like. A short story or a poem?
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